Thursday, October 27, 2005

Story time

I am low on blog material as I wait for pictures from last night's pumpkin carving party. Yes you heard right. A pumpkin carving party. So since it is almost Halloween and every time I need blog material I go into my "memory box" as my mom calls it, I will treat you all to a Halloween story I wrote when I was in 2nd grade. Remember this is copyrighted so don't try to steal it and create a bestselling children's book out of it. By the way, I am copying it exactly how it is written.

Drackila's Birthday

On Halloween night drackila was thinking. What is so special? he said to himself. He walked back and forth his cape was swinging in the air. While he was thinking he made a potion. The potion was as red as blood. The potion might give his membery back. He was frightened to take the the potion because he might turn into a snake a ghost or a ghoul. But then he rememberd what was so special it was his birthday. Because it was a full moon. And he didn't have to take the potion.
by Sarah

I have just a few comments:

1. I think I'm going to start using the word "membery".
2. I understand now why punctuation is so important.
3. "The potion was as red as blood." Um...ew? Should I have been put on some sort of future psycho watchlist?
4. All in all a good story for a 7 year old but kind of an anti-climactic ending, don't you think? There's all this build up about this mysterious potion which can do horrible things to you and then oh yeah it was his birthday. The end. I think I will need to beef it up a bit before I send it to the publisher.
5. Does anyone besides 7 year olds use the word "ghoul" anymore?


slcup said...

Membery. That's an awesome word.

Oh, that girl. said...

I haven't heard even a 7 year old say ghoul. Much less spell it correctly. But great story. Sucky ending, yes, but great story also. Smooches!

Erik Holtan said...

I actually wrote that story, I don't know why that kid stole it, and it was a romance novel.
I believe when I origionally wrote it, I stated that she held his throbbing membery until she put it down!
Oh well, the kid is a millionare now so what can I do!

danielle said...

i often use the word ghoul dammit.

Yort said...

What do you mean "wait"? Don't tell me you haven't gone digital! For shame.

Sarah said...

Yort, not to worry-I am digital. I'm just not the person who took the pics. I'm waiting for her to send me the pics.

Beebers said...

i just laughed out loud at your 7 year old story. it was hilarious. and yes, punctuation is important. along with a cohesive story line. ;)

Flan in Dagstaff said...

Sarah, formerly anonymous-from-your-hometown guy, here. Gotta tell ya, if as good in bed as ya are at makin' me laugh, well, ya must be mighty good in bed.

Anyhow, thanks for another hilarious episode.

Stay warm back home.


ThatGirl7278 said...

I have to say, word gets around (even down in SA) and Sarah IS as good in bed as she is funny.

So go get her Flan! (Wait, your name is Flan??)

Flan in Dagstaff said...

Girlie7278 - my name is a highly unoriginal play on words. You know, a little switcheroo... as in Clerah from Sveland, if that helps out any. Totally confused? Ok, fine. I'm Dan in Flagstaff... :)

I love the Riverwalk, BTW, even though it's touristy. Good times down there in S.A.

Johnny Virgil said...

Drakila!!!!! That is totally awesome. You know why? I have a story to match it. I was about the same age, and I wrote a story about Fankenstine. Drakila and Fankenstine. That makes me laugh my ass off just typing it. said...

Man, I wish I still had stories from when I was little! I used to write a lot of stories and illustrate them too ... if I can find some pictures I drew of Drakila when I was little, we need to get this book published together!

-jess said...

I totally love that you said ghoul. And a potion as red as blood... man that's one creepy Halloween story. You're good.